Agents, publicists, publishers, and various professionals in the film industry often ask for writers to “pitch” their projects in a couple sentences or less. Last weekend at the New Jersey Council for Teachers of English (NJCTE) conference, I told a room full of writers and teachers that I’d like to know my couple-sentence summary before I start writing. This morning I was working on that pitch for the book I’m writing next, a book I’m at the moment calling Waiting For Julie. I’m going to share a couple versions of my summary and I’d love to hear if you’ve got suggestions or if one of these appeals to you more than the rest:
- Meet Zuke: a young man who wants to be married and jumps at the chance when his buddy offers to introduce him to a woman he says will be perfect for him. Zuke meets Julie and he falls for her hard, but as the relationship progresses, he begins to wonder just how long a man can wait for a woman to start loving him back.
- In Waiting For Julie, Zuke is a basketball coach who wants to be married. When his buddy tells him he knows just the right girl, Zuke is all for meeting her. After a rocky start, Zuke falls hard and asks Julie out. When she says “yes,” Zuke is ecstatic, but as they begin to date, Julie doesn’t seem like him as much as he likes her. Zuke wonders how long a guy ought to wait to be loved back.
- Zuke’s buddy Cheese thinks he knows the perfect woman that Zuke’s got to meet. When Zuke meets this woman named Julie, it’s clear to him that she’s in love with Cheese. Eventually Zuke asks Julie out on a date, and he’s pumped when she says yes, but as the relationship progresses, he begins to wonder just how long a man should wait on the woman of his dreams.
Possible Script Logline: Just How Long Can A Man Wait on The Girl of His Dreams?
Rhetorical Problems for Me: This could be a man’s book in that Zuke’s a basketball coach with manly feelings that he keeps to himself as he gets involved trying to woo this gal Julie, but I’m not sure a man would buy a book called Waiting For Julie. Hmmmmmmm.